A Bitter Pill-A Rain and Retribution Vignette

Hi there, everyone! I hope you are hanging in there and well. Today, I am resurrecting an older vignette I wrote once upon a time. After publishing Rain and Retribution, I had a lot of people asking for an epilogue of sorts, which I did put in the comments at the time. This was sort of a fun comeuppance of sorts for Jane, who was not the sweet angel Mr. Bingley thought she was.

When I dug it out this weekend, I did go back over it a couple of times and do a sort of mini-rewrite. So, if you don’t remember it yet it seems familiar, that could be why 🙂 I hope you enjoy!


 

A Bitter Pill

As soon as the maid announced her, Elizabeth stepped forward to meet her aunt with a smile.

“Lizzy, I am so happy you could come,” said Mrs. Gardiner who carefully embraced her niece so as not to disturb the sleeping baby on her shoulder.

“I am pleased as well, Aunt.” The Gardiner’s well-appointed Cheapside home had been a welcome retreat when she was a child. The Gardiners affection for her was never conditional and made this place more of a childhood home than Longbourn had ever been.

Her aunt bit her lip while she folded down the blanket. They had not been in company together since the summer, so her aunt was, no doubt, eager to see eighteen-month-old William’s face. “He has grown, and he has become quite handsome.”

Elizabeth could not help but smile. While she thought William the most beautiful child, it was always gratifying to have others praise him as well. “He has indeed grown. I believe if he continues as he has, he will easily be as tall as Will before long.”

Her aunt’s hand rested upon Will’s back. “I think you may have some time for that.”

“I know, but as of late, he seems to outgrow his gowns so quickly.  I feel as though one day I will blink and he will suddenly appear before me a grown man.” The last was said on a sigh.

“This is not his normal nap time is it?”

Elizabeth shook her head. “No, he was awake very early this morning. I knew you hoped to see him today, but I had no expectation of him falling asleep in the carriage. I apologise for that.”

“I do not expect an apology, my dear. I know very well how children can be.” Mrs. Gardiner quickly peered around Elizabeth to William’s nursemaid, who waited patiently near the corner of the parlour. “Perhaps I should show Mary where he can rest down so we can visit?”

Once Elizabeth handed William off to the girl, she took a seat while they disappeared up the stairs. When Mrs. Gardiner returned, she sat opposite Elizabeth on the couch with her hands in her lap. “Will you remain in London long?”

“We plan to remain for a portion of the season. After I am presented at court, my husband wishes to take me to the theatre and Vauxhall Gardens.”

Her aunt nodded and relaxed into the cushions. “You should enjoy those outings. Your friend Lady Ashworth is sponsoring your presentation, is she not?”

“Yes, I believe you have made her acquaintance.”

“I have. I like her very much. If I remember correctly, her husband is Mr. Darcy’s cousin?”

“Yes, she is,” said Elizabeth. “I was very pleased when she became family. Friends are lovely but this means she will always be nearby.”

They paused at a knock that came from the front door. A maid stepped inside the room moments later and curtseyed. “Pardon me, ma’am, but Mrs. Mason is here.”

Elizabeth startled, when after the introduction, her sister, Jane, entered. She straightened in her seat and pulled back her shoulders. No matter their current relationship, Elizabeth refused to be rude, so she rose along with her aunt and curtseyed.

“Thank you, Sarah,” said Mrs. Gardiner.

Jane glanced at Elizabeth but remained facing their aunt. “Forgive me if this is an inconvenient time. I came for the old baby gown you offered. The one you said would be ideal for a pattern.”

Mrs. Gardiner glanced back and forth between the sisters, no doubt debating on whether the two of them should be left alone together. After a look at Elizabeth, her aunt bustled from the room.

Jane’s eyes first lit on Elizabeth’s gown before moving to her face. “I would not have expected to find Mrs. Darcy in Gracechurch Street.” Her sister’s skirts did little to hide the swell at her waist, though Jane did not rest a palm to the babe as Elizabeth had during that time. Instead, her hands remained clasped tightly in front of her. The pose was reminiscent of Miss Bingley.

Elizabeth’s eyebrows rose as she returned to her seat. “I came to visit my aunt. Surely, you are aware of our uncle and aunt’s visit to Pemberley.”

A smirk appeared upon her sister’s face. “Yes, however, receiving one’s less than stellar relatives is more easily concealed in the country than here in town.”

“My husband and I are inordinately fond of my aunt and uncle. We have never, nor will we ever pretend the connection does not exist.”

Jane scoffed and rolled her eyes. “You cannot claim to be the same person you once were. You have cast off your ideals, why not cast off all of your relations?”

“I beg your pardon.” Elizabeth’s tone hardened and her entire body stiffened.

“Well,” said Jane in a high-pitched manner that resembled their mother. “You once said you would only marry for the deepest love, but you did not marry for love, did you? You wed someone you detest.” She gave a bitter laugh. “Though, I suppose now that you have provided his heir, he will seek other company.” She gave a slight titter. “Of course, you could always avoid him like my father avoids my mother.”

Lizzy clenched her fists at her sides, her fingernails digging crescent-shaped grooves into her palm. “You know nothing. Mother crowed for years how you could not be so beautiful for nothing and perhaps you began to believe it a bit too much. A person is only as beautiful as what is inside of them, and Jane, you have become a decidedly unattractive woman.”

Her sister’s smug expression disappeared. “You dare—”

“Why should I not? You have chosen to resent me, though I cannot fathom why.”

Jane pressed her hand to her chest with such force it the sound resembled a slap. “You left me behind! You could have sent for me, ensured I was in company again with Mr. Bingley! I was the one who was supposed to marry a rich man!” By the last word, her voice had become an ear-piercing screech.

“I would not have done Mr. Bingley such a disservice,” said Elizabeth as she stood. “His feelings for you were honest and true and you desired him because he was rich and amiable. He deserved so much more. I could not bear for him to be in such an unequal alliance so I told him you held no affection for him.”

Jane’s nostrils flared. “Perhaps I should have set my cap at Mr. Darcy. He married you. I could have captured him if I had wanted!”

Elizabeth lifted one eyebrow and took a few steps closer to her sister. “My husband did not think your heart easily touched—that is what he told Mr. Bingley. He thought you would accept his friend for mercenary purposes, and it seems he was correct. He never would have considered you either.

“I pity you, Jane. You have a husband, and you are obviously with child, but if you never allow anyone to touch your heart, you will be a lonely woman.” Jane made an unladylike noise through her nose. “That sounds more like Lydia than the Jane I remember. How long have you hidden that you are similarly selfish?” Her sister flinched.

Elizabeth took another step forward as she held her hand up with her finger pointed. “Lydia loved Wickham and that was the reason for her mistake. Your error has been closing your heart. Will you guard your heart from your child? I pity him or her if you do.”

“You have no right to criticise me for something you have done yourself!” Jane’s voice surely carried through the house.

“No, I married my friend who I love with everything in me. I have never sought to be so cold.”

The door opened as Mrs. Gardiner hurried back into the room, a baby gown grasped in her hand. “That is quite enough, Jane. You are in my home, and my guests will be treated with respect or you will not be welcome. Do you understand?” Jane’s chin hitched back as though she had been slapped. Mrs. Gardiner gestured behind Jane to where Mr. Mason stood in the doorway.

“Mrs. Mason, I would like a word.” Jane blanched but followed her husband into the empty dining room opposite the parlour.

“I am sorry for her behaviour,” said Mrs. Gardiner.

“You are not responsible for what she said. None of this is your fault.”

A sigh escaped her aunt’s lips as they both sat down. “I should not have left you alone with her.”

“I am capable of withstanding my sister’s spiteful words.” They both turned at the door opening to Mr. Darcy entering.

“I suppose you heard all of the fuss?” asked Elizabeth.

“Your sister’s voice did carry into the study. By his countenance, I would say Mr. Mason is displeased. He heard her mention of Mr. Bingley.”

Mrs. Gardiner exhaled heavily. “It is no one’s fault but her own. She should not have spoken.” A wail carried down from upstairs, prompting her aunt to smile. “I shall fetch William. I should be pleased to have a moment with him before you return home.”

As soon as Mrs. Gardiner exited the room, Darcy drew his wife into his arms. “How are you really?”

She smiled and placed her hands upon his chest. “I am well. I cannot claim what she said was a surprise, but I had hoped she could, at the very least, be civil.”

“I know, Love.” He pressed a kiss to her temple. A moment later, a loud squeal heralded William running towards them on his little legs. Darcy scooped him up with a laugh and wrapped his free arm back around his wife.

“The children have need of me upstairs,” said Mrs. Gardiner who followed just behind William. She kissed Elizabeth’s cheek. “I will visit with you more tomorrow night when we have dinner at Darcy House.”

Elizabeth smiled. “I look forward to it.” Her aunt tweaked William’s nose, prompting a babyish giggle, before she hurried back up the stairs.

Darcy wrapped his arms around his family once more. “Are you sure you are well?”

“I am very well.”

He leaned in and gently brushed his lips against hers.  “Then let us go home.”

~*~

Mrs. Jane Mason quietly listened to her husband’s scolding as she fumed. How dare Lizzy tell Mr. Bingley she was indifferent! Lizzy was no better than her, marrying Mr. Darcy. She had always hated the man, and now to claim he was her friend and she loved him. Pah! Who knew Lizzy was such an accomplished liar?

“Mrs. Mason, are you listening?”

She started. “Yes, I apologise if I caused you any discomfort or embarrassment.”

He seemed appeased by her answer, and she exhaled as her shoulders relaxed. Mr. Mason left the dining room, and Jane’s attention was arrested by the sight of her sister in Mr. Darcy’s arms. Their young son was secure in Mr. Darcy’s embrace and leaned against his father’s shoulder. Meanwhile, Mr. Darcy softly kissed his wife’s temple while her hand rested upon their son’s back.

Her sister’s presence in his embrace was shocking, but the affection and happiness that radiated from both of their countenances left a bitter taste in Jane’s mouth.

A great yawning emptiness in her chest threatened to engulf her. She placed a hand to her belly and glanced towards her husband, who waited for her near the door. When the baby rolled, she looked down to the bump. Was it possible for her to have feelings for her husband?

“Mrs. Mason? Are you coming?”

She swallowed down the bile that burned at her throat, nodded, and stepped forward to follow her husband through the door.

 

Rain and Retribution

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    • denise on March 31, 2021 at 12:20 am
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    Wow, that was quite a scene.

    1. Jane is quite a piece of work in R&R. Thanks for stopping by!

    • Linda on March 31, 2021 at 1:34 am
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    Thank you! Rain and Retribution is a wonderful book. I like to reread it every now and then, especially the chapters in the inn and when they first marry. You captured their yearning and insecurities so well, it is such a pleasure to see them become a couple.

    1. Thank you so much! They were so young and on their own in that story at the beginning. 🙂 I’m thrilled you enjoy it so much!

    • Sarah P on March 31, 2021 at 2:18 am
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    I always thought ‘A Bitter Pill’ was a great, fitting Epilogue to Rain and Retribution, which is still one of my all time favourites P&P stories. This slightly tweaked version is even better.

    1. I’m a different writer than I was then. I’ve toyed with doing a rewrite of sorts to R&R, but I’m not sure people would like that so I’ve left it. I’m glad you liked my updated version 😉 Thanks, Sarah!

    • Glynis on March 31, 2021 at 4:10 am
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    Loved it! Thank you so much Leslie. <3
    I never saw the original version but you know how much I love R&R, I really can’t say how many times I’ve read it but there will be numerous times more!
    Jane has obviously not improved and I’m so glad that she witnessed the true love between Darcy and Elizabeth!

    1. I liked the idea of giving her the opportunity to change. Perhaps to see what she’s missing and perhaps try to attain some of that for herself with her own family. I’d like to think she managed to find some happiness. I don’t want all of the not so nice characters to have sad endings 🙂 Thank you, Glynis!

    • Marie H on March 31, 2021 at 1:22 pm
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    Enjoyed this, as I did R&R. Always a pleasure to read anything you write. Oh Jane…
    Hoping you have something new in the works for us soon too!

    1. I’m working! E and D are being stubborn as usual but we’ll see what happens 😉 Thank you, Marie!

    • Debbie on March 31, 2021 at 5:59 pm
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    Enjoyed this vignette. Jane is true to her character ifrom this story. I am glad she got to see how our ODC truly feel about each other. Maybe, just maybe she will learn

    1. If not for her sake, I would hope she does for her child! Thank you, Debbie!

    • Michelle H on March 31, 2021 at 6:19 pm
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    When I first read R&R I had never read a ‘bad Jane,’ so I was really shocked. After losing count of how many times I’ve reread this, I still find your bad Jane shocking. The scene you gave us today is so bittersweet. I just wanted to smack Jane, and then felt miserable for her….great writing there. 🙂 My first thought about your rewriting R&R is ‘Oh, NO!’ But then hey, you’re the book mama here. I don’t have to like it though. (Big pout-y face.)

    Just trying to tell you thanks for the expanded scene and THANK YOU for writing that book. Have a wonderful Spring, Leslie. Good luck with that next book. And I dearly hope you are doing well, better than last month!! Many blessings.

    1. Hi Michelle! I am doing infinitely better than last month. Injections are a miserable experience but the benefit was well worth it! I can sit!!!!! A huge victory for me. I’m sitting in a recliner now with my kitten in my lap and the laptop to the side (because she’s the boss of course!) and it’s one of the best feelings ever! I’m still icing my back and sciatic nerve, but I went from a 6-8 pain level to 1-2. I have a follow-up injection next week. Not looking forward to it, but everyone keeps telling me to have the follow-ups. The biggest thing is I can write again. I couldn’t write when my pain level was so high.
      As for the rewrite on R&R, I took it out right after the move, started a new file, and began butchering. Then, I stopped. People love it the way it is. Yes, I am tempted to rework it more than re-write it, but I don’t know that I’ll ever really do it. I have stories always wanting out of my head and I’m always more interested in those. (I know you are too 🙂 )
      Big hugs!

    • J. W. Garrett on March 31, 2021 at 11:27 pm
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    OMG! That was pretty powerful. I have not read this yet. Looks like I need to read it now just to see what started all this. Thanks for sharing this with us.

    1. I’m so glad you enjoyed it!! Thank you!

    • Beatrice on April 1, 2021 at 12:09 am
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    Nice! I wish I could trade my ebook for a copy with this epilogue.

    1. I’ve got a number of shorts that I haven’t decided what I want to do with them. I might add it one day. I have thought about it. Thanks, Beatrice!

    • Judy P on April 1, 2021 at 10:45 am
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    I reread R&R every year its so good. Thanks for sharing this scene. I have always thought Jane was not what she seemed.

    1. I’m thrilled you enjoy R&R so much! No, Jane, in this story anyway, was not what she seemed. It’s been a lot of fun to take her in that direction. Thanks, Judy!

    • Carole in Canada on April 2, 2021 at 11:38 am
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    Loved the updated scene! Loved Rain and Retribution. I think I need to do a re-read again!

    1. I’m glad you enjoyed it! Thanks, Carole!

    • Linda T. on April 5, 2021 at 2:41 pm
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    That was interesting, but it only makes me want to read the original again. I will do so immediately after finishing the book I just started.

    1. Happy re-read! Thank you, Linda!

    • Sheila L. Majczan on April 8, 2021 at 5:03 pm
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    I did read and enjoy Rain and Retribution but that was in 2015 so I remember little about it. I do know I enjoyed it. The Jane you paint here is a bitter woman, sadly. I wonder who Elizabeth considers her best friend, if not Jane. Aunt Gardiner is a friend but more as a mother figure. Thanks for sharing here.

    1. Elizabeth had Elaine (Lainey) by the end of the book as her best friend. I don’t know why I was fascinated by the idea of Jane not being what she seemed. Sometimes she almost seems too good in canon. Thanks, Sheila!

    • Gwyn on April 19, 2021 at 8:56 pm
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    I adore R&R and read it every year as well. A Bitter Pill was definitely needed!

    • Bats on June 18, 2021 at 12:03 am
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    I love Rain and Retribution! It’s one of my top faves, especially the first ~40%-ish. Thank you for posting an epilogue.
    Best of luck with your book launch for Agony and Hope! 🙂 as a reader, I can absolutely see your growth as a writer.
    (And no pressure, but if you ever are inclined, I would love to read a “new” take / rewrite on R&R, its one of my favorites. I’d probably be right up first in line to give you my dollars lol. )

    • Lynda on December 6, 2022 at 8:21 am
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    Just finished rereading R&R for the nth time. Had to find A Bitter Pill to make it complete. I love Rain and Retribution it is one of my all time favorites, I also like a “bad jane” story.

    Maybe expanding R&R would be ok but I love it the way it is now.

    Thank you for all of your fabulous stories, I pre ordered the next one.

    1. Thanks, Lynda! As I always say, re-reads are the best compliments 🙂 I don’t have plans to expand R&R. I did a clean up of sorts on it when I had it made into an audiobook, which was a glance over to pick better words on some sentences and just give it a better edit overall. I’ve learned a lot since writing and publishing that book so tweaking a few tiny things wasn’t too big of a overhaul.

        • Lynda on December 28, 2022 at 8:59 am
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        I also have the audiobook. Actually I have most of your audio books along with the books.

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