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First Peek: Longbourn: Dragon Entail — 27 Comments

  1. Thank you. I have been worrying as to how Elizabeth will be free of Longbourn. You snuck in the way it could go… I was hoping Pemberley could request her from the Council, but this way may be better.

    Have Mary speak to Mr. Collins, and they marry instead.

    I hate Elizabeth has to deal with Mr. Wickham and Mr. Collins at the same time.

    I look forward to reading the next chapter.

  2. Elizabeth needs a large “bird-Dragon” like a vulture to protect her from both wicked Wickham and Crazy, creepy Collins. Yucky!

  3. I have no idea how Elizabeth can even think of liking such a creepy person as Wickham! He is so obviously not what he appears. Come back Darcy and save her from both Wickham and Collins. I look forward to seeing how he does it as I’m hoping that is what happens!thanks for this excerpt Maria.

    • I’ve always wondered that too. In Austen’s original, he had her utterly convinced of his goodness and truthfulness. I wasn’t until after the Hundsford proposal that she realized she had it all wrong. Thanks Glynis!

  4. Wickham is as ‘sticky sweet’ as the treacle and twice as dangerous! Why couldn’t Elizabeth keep wondering at some of the cues Aunt Gardiner was displaying?! She is not as perceptive as the dragons! Now I wonder at Mary’s ability to ‘manage’ Collins…she certainly doesn’t deserve to be saddled with him either. Yes, how much have both heard in her ‘story’ to the children? I certainly wouldn’t trust either of them!

    Also interesting is the sadness Elizabeth feels for the loss of the drakeling:

    “The drakling had been with them less than a month. It was foolish that she should still feel so bereft at the hatchling’s removal to Rosings.”

    Or is it the loss of both, the drakeling and Darcy!

    What a delightful treat for after Christmas! I wont keep you any longer from your writing!

    • Thanks, Carole! Elizabeth is rather jaded right now. She’s very put out with Darcy for, in her mind, taking Pemberley away from here. That only makes her more sympathetic toward Wickham, unfortunately.

  5. I love this. Wick knows about dragons as we know. He must have an inkling she will be the next keeper and wants in on that. I think Collins hears but has trained himself to hate all things dragon. 😉 collins seems particulatly cruel-i can’t put my finger on it. I can’t wait to read more.

  6. I do like the idea, Carol, of a vulture but then, isn’t Wickham or even, Collins, much like Vultures in their own behavior? Swooping in to get what they can for themselves. And Collins almost before Mr. Bennet’s death claiming ownership of his choice in a bride as a harbinger of his future viewpoint as to being Master of the estate?

    Thanks for this chapter. I did read the first book so am anxious for the next in the series. Happy New Year to all.

  7. Well done! You covered a lot of ground in this chapter, setting up relationships and dragon lore.
    I have wondered about Lizzy’s cluelessness about Wickham (also did in reading Book 1): Egg missing from Pemberley; Egg showing up in hands of militia; Wickham being in militia and formerly connected to Pemberley; Darcy arguing with Wickham. It shouldn’t have been difficult for her to conclude that W was the egg-thief.

    I’ve also wondered whether Lizzy did not herself become imprinted on Pemberley, since she participated in the early feeding. That might account for her melancholy when the little one departed.

    I’m hoping, as someone else here suggested, that Mary may find her own way to pursuade Collins that she is a better choice than Lizzy. (I can imagine that dragon Longbourn may require some intervention by higher powers.)

    Enjoying very much this universe you have created.

    • In JA’s original Pride and Prejudice Elizabeth should have picked up all the clues about Mr. Wickham and didn’t there either. She should have in both cases, but I think her prejudice toward Mr. Darcy made her particularly susceptible to Wikcham’s manipulations.

      You may just be on to something about Elizabeth imprinting upon Pemberley…I wonder if the Blue Order knows about such things. Hmm….
      Thanks Margaret!

  8. I feel like a child at Christmas, waiting with great expectation for my gifts…which will occur when this book is published in full!!

    But this tidbit was the perfect Christmastide treat, and I absolutely adored it!!

    Poor Elizabeth!! I hope that Mary will be able to step up and catch Mr. Collins’ eye, thus freeing Elizabeth from the dreadful future of marrying the lout. But she will have to get over her liking for Wickham first . . . the cad!

    And now he knows that Elizabeth is acquainted with dragonlore which places her in a dangerous situation given all that happened in the first book. I can’t wait to read more!! If you need another proofreader, I’m your woman! 🙂

    Thank you for this lovely excerpt, Maria, and I wish you a joyous Second Day of Christmas!!

    Warmly,
    Susanne 🙂

  9. Please write faster! I love this story!!! Phoenix reminds me of a little chihuahua who tries to take on a much bigger dog! Poor Lizzy! Stuck with Collins and Wickham! What did those two overhead? And how much trouble will they cause? And dealing with stubborn fairy dragons. Not to mention Longbourn and Mr. Bennet trying to force Lizzy to marry Collins as well as Mrs. Bennet and Mrs. Phillips. Love that the companion dragons are all worried for Lizzy. Heather’s observations of Mary are interesting and makes me wonder if they should combine forces to ‘convince’ Mr. Collins to marry Mary but who will convince Longbourn if this plan. Lizzy needs to heed Aunt Gardiner and April’s advice regarding Wickham. Hoping for a visit from Walker soon!!!

  10. Yay! I was so excited to see this post. I loved your first dragon book and can’t wait for this one to come out. How many will there be altogether? I wish Collins would decide Lizzy isn’t ‘worthy’ of his exalted self and refuse to follow the plan. That would be best of all! Either that or Pemberley can demand Lizzy for Darcy and eat Collins, although I imagine he’d cause indigestion. Thanks again!

    • Thanks, Alecia. Thee will be three to get through the Pride and Prejudice story ark, so at least that many. Then after that I’m toying with a number of other ideas, so I would like to write more after that, maybe even a persuasion variation.

      A dragon eating Collins is a rather appealing option right now, isn’t it?

  11. I loved the first book and can’t wait to see how this one plays out. Collins AND Wickham at the same time? Poor Lizzy.

  12. All the dragon lore is amazing, can’t wait for the second book to come out. Are there any good mythological books, where one might learn more about dragons?

    • I have been searching the internet sites and encyclopedias for dragon mythos. I have based much of what I am doing on established mythos, but I am also created my own approach as I go. Thanks, Tanya!

  13. I’m playing a bit of catch up on posts and wanted to say I am thrilled to hear the next volume is on the horizon because I’ve just finished reading volume 1 and loved it so much. I’m super impressed by the dragon-filled ‘world’ you’ve created and intertwined with P&P, and with differences to the canon plot. I can’t wait for the rest of the story to be revealed! Thanks so much, Maria.

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