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Jane’s Poetic Admirer — 35 Comments

  1. Well I say good for Elizabeth! How annoying was he? Just imagine living with someone who could only speak in rhyme! Quite restricting I would think, in fact I think I’d have to blink, to keep my eyes wide open so I’d stay awake until he’d go!! Oh no it.is catching 😞. Thanks for this story I can’t wait for the next one 😊

  2. Lovely.
    My opinion is that Jane was uncomfortable around him. i think she was relieved to be rescued by lizzy. And not have to exceed any non serene actions !

    Almost Luke good cop/ bad cop

    A very fun read!

    • I agree, Carol. But with Jane having such a sweet disposition, she may not have known how to ‘kindly’ rid herself of him.

  3. This is a delightful and oh-so-clever story; I thoroughly enjoyed it. 🙂

    The Elizabeth’s line from P&P about a sonnet driving away love was developed wonderfully well. 🙂 The young Mr. Shirk (what a name!) has yet to realize something that I teach the students in my poetry writing workshops: a rhyme does not a poem make. 😉

    Thank you for a morning of grins and giggles as I read this gem! Brilliantly done, Kara! 🙂

    With warm wishes for a joyous 11th Day of Christmastide,
    Susanne 🙂

    • Thanks so much, Susanne! I’m so glad you enjoyed it! (I actually used the last name Shirk from my very first crush of a boy in 3rd grade.) But he had the nerve to suddenly move away without telling me, and the teacher – who had also not been informed of this – asked ME where he was. Never heard from him again.

  4. Clever story. Poor Jane having to endure this man for her first ball. Love that Lizzy is quick on her feet. I can relate to this scene. My fifth graders were intimate with their dictionary trying to find a rhyme for orange. You writing was a clever way to stop his rhymes. That would drive me crazy if I was talking with someone that did this! Thanks for writing this scene. Helps to understand Darcy and Elizabeth’s conversation about poetry while at Netherfield.

  5. Poor Jane! I’m sure Mr. Shirk would could use her first name in relating his heart of pain. He may well steer clear of orange roses when his next poem he composes! Goes to show how intelligent Elizabeth already is!
    Delightful!

  6. Thanks so much for lifting my day
    As my last story caused me much dismay.
    This is much better,
    No Darcy here to fret her.

    Thanks!

  7. The mother admires when Jane only tires of rhyming sentences in verse which make Elizabeth terse.

    Thank you, Kara, for such a fun story. The look at a first ball for teenage sisters’ eyes. What a great way too start my morning.

  8. No poetry here! This reminds me of the conversations I had with my step-father while driving to Florida. He LOVED to use puns so we had a long discussion about the Bible using that device. My mother was soon groaning and turning up the radio.

    This was a clever and enjoyable “missing scene”. Can’t imagine Mrs. Bennet wanting Jane married off at age 15 but then they did marry younger oft times.

    • A little bit of anything can be enjoyable, but when overdone it can be annoying. Judging by Mrs. Bennet’s reaction to Lydia marrying Wickham at that age, I would guess she’d be OK with it. Thanks, Sheila!

  9. A man with verses who did not write curses
    But attempted instead to turn her head
    With words that rhymed, not leaving her sublime
    Till her sister said no and alas he did go.

    Oh well. Jen Red

  10. In January, we get our fill of Jane,
    The eldest sister, never once called “plain.”
    The only complaint? “She smiles too much,”
    Yet Bingley’s heart those smiles did touch.

    Thanks for sharing this funny backstory. Three cheers for Elizabeth, who chased away Mr. Shirk. You know that Mrs. Bennett would have had Jane married off long before Bingley set foot in Netherfield. Then where would our serene lady be?

  11. Great poem, Wendy! This is so much fun! Yes, I think Mrs. Bennet would be willing to marry her off as soon as she could.

  12. A fabulous bit of pastiche!
    It made me roar and screech!
    Your Shirk is a humorous peach!
    Please write more, I beseech!

  13. A charming little vignette, clearly meant to entertain; it succeeds most admirably: the man cannot Shirk the pain. And that is why I am NOT a poet!

  14. Such fun reading, thank you. After several false starts I even managed to come up with a rhyme of my own.

    A young man obsessed,
    Who cannot express.
    A young lady so kind,
    Who can’t seem to mind.
    And a sister whose teasing,
    Is far from appeasing!

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