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Jane in January – P&P Missing Scene – Mr. Darcy and Colonel Fitzwilliam Take a Trip to Cheapside — 75 Comments

  1. I loved it! I think this is the first time I’ve read the actual scene where Darcy tells Col. Fitz about Bingley and Jane so that the Colonel can later share it with Lizzy. Oh Darcy is digging his hole deep and he has no idea.

    US Resident- I have an ecopy of Monica’s book, but any of the rest of the prizes would be fine. Thanks for your generous giveaways everyone!

    • I probably shouldn’t admit that Darcy spilling about Bingley was not part of my original plan. Darcy had another plan and it popped out of his mouth without any warning whatsoever. He certainly has a mind of his own!
      I’m so glad you liked it, Sophia!

    • I believe it is important. While he is friends with Bingley, Bingley relies on Darcy to an extent that it’s not an equal type of alliance (if that makes sense.) Aside from financial matters, the Colonel is his own man. He would not look to Darcy to steer him as Bingley does. Thanks, Janet!

    • I wish I could take credit for Jane at the park, but that was a suggestion when I mentioned this idea for the scene. I love re-purposing Jane Austen’s quotes, especially into an entirely different context. I’m glad they worked so well.
      Thanks so much, Monica!

    • LOL! I’m sorry, Eileen! My mind never went that far. Just banter between the cousins. I love writing their banter! Thanks!

    • Yup, he’s steadily digging that hole bigger and bigger, isn’t he? Oh well, he had good intentions. Thanks, Kathy!

    • I do enjoy fics where Jane and the Colonel become a couple. It’s one thing to give advice and opinions, but Bingley followed them so blindly that I have a difficult time liking the fact that Jane accepts him at the end. Thanks, Betsy!

      • True. I wouldn’t have chosen such a fickle man! 🙂 But that is Jane’s flaw, is it not? Too kind and forgiving to have such standards? Jane is laid in contrast with Lizzy’s almost over-discerning nature, so to me it was no surprise that Jane would forgive Bingley–and Mr. Bennet’s joke that “they will forever exceed their income” and they would be cheated by their servants rings more true than not to me (which is the mark of a very good joke indeed, I say!).

        • I agree that it is most certainly her flaw. It would’ve made me crazy if I was her sister or friend!

          Thanks, Beth!

  2. Great scene. The Colonel reads Darcy so well. I always enjoy reading his perspective. Also, having Darcy picture Elizabeth walking in the park was very fitting.
    I am from the US. I already have the two books by Marilyn. Your giveaways are so great! The missing P&P scenes are treats in themselves! Thanks to all of you!

    • I enjoy the idea of the Colonel and Darcy having such a bantering relationship. I feel like we see a hint of that behaviour at Rosings when Elizabeth teases him about being taciturn in company to the Colonel. Thanks Maureen!

  3. I really enjoyed this Leslie. Wouldn’t it be funny if the establishment the Colonel and Darcy is going to had a connection to the Gardiners. Love this. The colonel’s closeness to Darcy is brought out. They are more like brothers than cousins. I like the colonel saying, unbelievingly, that she smiles too much? And then Darcy mentions that fine eyes might garner his attention. Well, we know they did. I loved Darcy picturing Elizabeth walking in the park and trying to figure out which house she would’ve stayed in. He has it bad and he doesn’t even realize it. Thank you for this fun missing scene!

    • Oh, I love the idea of the Gardiners being the merchant! That would’ve been fun! The fun part of the smiles too much and fine eyes is that Elizabeth Bennet likely smiled a great deal herself. We know she was witty and had a sense of humour, so Darcy must have enjoyed the happy twinkle in her eyes.
      Thanks Deborah!

    • Not a scene in one of my novels. I wrote it specifically for Jane in January. All of my books so far have that bantering kind of relationship between the Colonel and Darcy. I do have one that I’m in the process of fleshing out and writing where the relationship will be altered, but I’m a ways from releasing that one! Thanks, Charlene!

  4. I had assumed the merchant they were going to see was Mr Gardiner! Lol wouldn’t that ruffle Darcy’s feathers even more. But if you gotta have a tradesman as an uncle in law you might as well get some good wine out of it right! 😉

    So now when Darcy says in Kent that he hadn’t seen Jane in town, he’s pretty much lying. Even though it was for just a second and he was cruising by in a carriage. I always gathered that while he knew she was there via Caroline, he never actually saw her, so he wouldn’t feel guilty when he told Elizabeth he hadn’t seen her.

    • “… and she thought he looked a little confused as he answered that he had never been so fortunate as to meet Miss Bennet.”

      I think the room to dabble is there since he says “meet”. He never spoke with her or had a conversation or else he would have to admit it, and Jane probably would’ve mentioned it before Elizabeth left for Hunsford.
      The 1995 P&P has Darcy overlooking as Jane leaves the Bingley’s in a flashback. By choice of her words, I think JA left a bit of room.

      Thanks, Monica!

  5. Welcome to the group Leslie! I like the tone you have set for their private banter. In many versions, Mr Gardiner deals in cloth and investments – no reason he could not also have ventures in liquor warehouses. Just past the park the carriage suddenly stops at their destination… From the other comments, we all seem to be heading in the same direction. Time for a vote? LOL (kidding)

    Please save any prizes for the other readers, cheers.

    • Hi Dave! He does make sense as a liquor merchant. I just missed the obvious I suppose! 😉 Thanks for the lovely welcome and the comment!

  6. I love all of these glimpses behind the scenes! Thank you for them!

    I live in Canada, but I also have a US postal box (if it makes any difference!)

  7. Oh Darcy Darcy Darcy, get rid of your blinkers! I’ve never read an account of how the Colonel found out about Jane and Bingley, always good to read something new.

    • Yay! I’m sure we could do it any number of ways, but this one was rather fun and I could tie it in with the ball and the dinner as well. I’m so glad everyone likes it.
      Thanks, Debra!

  8. “…you will be at a loss as to how to win her favour.” Perfect! What an enjoyable scene; their banter was such fun.

    I’m an international girl…

  9. What a fun episode you have created! I enjoyed it very much… always love stories that include the close relationship between Darcy and the Colonel… he understands Darcy and helps to keep him honest. And like Dave and others, I fully expected that the merchant they were visiting would be part of Mr. Gardner’s business… and perhaps Darcy would get to meet him and find out what an amiable respectable gentleman he was! Also loved that he happened to see Jane with one of her little cousins too. He should have noticed that although she was smiling, there was a hint of sadness in her eyes as well… He who was so observant of fine eyes! 🙂
    Thank you, Leslie, and glad you have joined this fine group.

  10. I do love banter between Darcy and Fitzwilliam. It always shows the human side, or the humor side (ha!) of Darcy. Also love that Fitzwilliam has a way of talking him into accompanying him to places he might otherwise not go, thus losing the opportunity for broadening his horizons. =D

    • Colonel Fitzwilliam usually has such a sense of humour in most JAFF and it plays well with Darcy’s more serious nature. I enjoy writing the two of them together.
      Thanks, Stephanie!

    • LOL! Yes, well then he’d have even more of a conversation I’m sure…or the colonel would want to stop for a chat! Uh oh! Thanks, Susanne!

  11. Love this scene! Remembering where it comes in the novel, and thinking about Darcy having Elizabeth so much on his mind already, is really fun! As he said he was in the middle before he realized he’d begun, and here, we see him just past the beginning and not really recognizing it yet!

  12. Love this scene. Thank goodness for the Colonel. He doesn’t need Darcy’s approval like Charles. I hope the wine merchant is Jane and Lizzy’s Uncle Gardiner. Not sure what Colonel Fitzwilliam knows, but something is up. Darcy is in for a surprise! After Lizzy’s profound refusal, his haughty remark about having a wine merchant and doesn’t need a new one, should stop and make him think! Too bad Lizzy wasn’t back in town and both were seen with all of the Gardiner children. That would have been a funny scene.

  13. If Dave wants a vote…I agree that I was expecting Uncle Gardiner to be the wine and spirits merchant and that somehow Darcy realizes that this fine gentleman is uncle to the Bennet girls. “Pass the salt, I have to eat my words.” Col. Fitzwilliams always seems to manipulate Darcy and find out what he is brooding about. (At least in the JAFF versions I read.) Sometimes it is with drink and sometimes it is a wild guess or sometimes, someone lets slip a hint and the Colonel jumps on it.

    Great addition to my favorite story, Leslie.

  14. The Colonel know his cousin well. Little does he realize how true his last statement will be… “I pity you when they do. You are so accustomed to maintaining your distance, you will be at a loss as to how to win her favour.”

    Like the others, love the bantering between Darcy and the Colonel. Great post Leslie! Thank you!

    • I do like the idea. I don’t think he would meet Uncle Gardiner, since he requests the introduction at Pemberley. Thanks, Dung!

  15. Great scene, Leslie! You can feel the friendship, as well as Darcy’s real sense of being unsettled by the location, conversation, and seeing Jane. Nothing more fun than the missing scenes!

  16. Darcy almost said what he was thinking out loud to Colonel Fitzwilliam. Nice vignette of the two of them seeing Jane Bennet. Shame on Darcy for not telling Colonel Fitzwilliam who she is exactly.

    • He likely thought them to never cross paths, so who did the white lie really harm? (Other than himself, of course, but he won’t know that until Hunsford.) Thanks, Patty!

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  18. Great scene! I have always enjoyed the true relationship/friendship between Darcy and the Colonel. I like many others figured the merchant would end up being Mr Gardiner, or connected to him. What fun that would have been.
    US resident.

    • I love their relationship. They’re fun to write because there’s no telling what one might say to the other. Thanks, Sarah!

  19. The Colonel knows Darcy quite well! In fact, too well for Darcy’s comfort. Wonderful excerpt. I love the interaction with the cousins. But Darcy best be careful with his lies. The Colonel will be on to him.

    • He might remember it’s Jane if he ever makes her acquaintance after marrying Bingley, but he only caught a glimpse in passing. Even so, I think the Colonel will get why. He’s pretty astute on those things. Thanks BeckyC!

  20. Mmmm, interesting that Darcy conceals Jane’s identity even after telling Fitzwilliam about keeping Bingley apart from her. I wonder if the proprietor will be a certain fashionable Uncle…

    • He could be, but if I’d written it, I wouldn’t have Darcy meet Mr. Gardiner. They hadn’t met when the Gardiners went to Pemberley. It would be fun for JAFF, though! Thanks, Lauren!

  21. This was a great scene between Darcy and the Colonel. Darcy just keeps up his mask of indifference while there is such turmoil just below the surface. I am also wondering if the merchant they are going to visit is actually Mr. Gardiner….

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